YEAR 2011 ESSAY - UEC EXAM - CHINESE INDEPENDENCE SCHOOL 独中英文写作范例- 历届考题2011年

Imagine that you have no TV, computer or video games for one week. Describe some activities you would do to keep yourself occupied. 

 

Grammatical errors :  

     I am a person who loves watching television very much , playing computer and video games, so it is hard to imagine what I would do to keep myself occupied if had no TV, computer or video games for one week!  

 

If I have no TV, computer or video games for one week, I would do more exercise to keep fit. I want to organize and arrange my time to take more time to exercise. In morning, I am jogging in the park everyday. In the evening, I would drive to the gym centre in order to keep fit. I want myself to look balanced and thin, yet I can wear my beautiful dresses or clothes and I do not have to consider the problems of size while buying clothes. A balanced body shape would be instead of the fat body before.

 

I would also like to learn something such as cooking, drawing and handicraft in my free time. I can go some centre to take part in some class to learn those things. After learning, I would like to cook and prepare three delicious meal for my family. Drawing some picture to my friends. I can sew some clothes for my family, friends and some children who are staying in the orphanage. Learning is my treasure.

 

In addition, I would take time to do charity work. I would go to orphanages, old folk’s homes and salvation army. I would join these activities such as bring gifts, taking care of them and others. Besides, I would follow some teams which are helping the victims who are affected by the natural disaster. All these activities would help them to get out of hardship and they are meaningful to me.

 

Finally, I can conclude that my life become meaningful , occupied and more systematic if I have no TV, computer or video games for one week. 

After Correction: 

Since I enjoy playing computer and video games as well as watching television, it is difficult for me to conceive what I would do if I were to go a week without using a computer or playing a video game. 

 

If I had a week without access to a computer, TV, or video games, I would exercise more to stay in shape. To make more time for exercising, I wish to plan and schedule my time better. I always jog at the park in the morning. I would drive to the gym facility in the evening to stay in shape. I want to look balanced and small while still being able to wear my gorgeous dresses and stuff without having to worry about size issues. Instead of the previous fat body, there would be a balanced body shape. 

 

In my spare time, I'd like to pick up new skills like cooking, sketching, and crafting. I can visit a facility to participate in a class to learn such things. I want to learn how to cook and make three delectable meals for my family. Creating a drawing for my pals. I am able to sew some garments for my loved ones, close friends, and even orphanage residents. My treasure is knowledge. 

 

I would also make time for charitable endeavours. I would visit old people's homes, salvation armies, and orphanages. I would participate in such things as bringing gifts, looking after them, and others. In addition, I would keep track of those organisations that are assisting those afflicted by natural disasters. All of these endeavours, which I find worthwhile, would aid people in escaping adversity. 

 

Finally, I can say that giving up TV, computers, and video games for a week makes my life more purposeful, busy, and organised.