Writing Essay - Informal Letter- Example 2 (Chinese Independent High School Standard - Senior 1 ) -华文独立中学英文写作范例

Question: 

Directed Writing:
You have just returned  from a three-day outdoor activity camp. You have decided to write a letter to a friend about your experiences at the camp.

 
Write your letter based on all the notes below:

- who organised the camp

- date of the camp

- transport to the campsite

- number of participants

- location of the camp

- accommadation

- give two relevant examples of : activities / benefits / problems 

Informal Letter( Original Version) :

No.28, Taman Bukit,

93250 Kuching,

Sarawak. 

10^th May 2012

Dear Michael,   

 

        How have you been recently? Do you have any special plans for your holidays? I want to tell you something, which the aim that I am writing this letter to you.

 

      I have just returned from a three-day outdoor activity camp. Thus, I want to tell you about my experiences at the camp. Last week, 3th May 2012 I had took part in a camp organised by our school’s scouts. The number of participants of this camp is twenty-eight students. It is the first time that such a camp was organised. The location of the camp is in Sematan which is a very beautiful place.

 

All of us gathered in school and waited for the bus to take us there. When we arrived at Sematan, we set up camp and pitched our tents there.This type of  accommadation get us closer to nature and allowed us to feel what of was like living outdoor.  

 

I was very happy during this time with my  friends there. It was because there were many funny games and activities. On first day, we played “ ice breaking” games. I have learned that the first way to make new friends and this could train us not to be shy to talk to people.   

 

Besides that, I also took part in many activities in the next two days. There were cooking games and night trekking adventure. The cooking game was very funny, because I have never cooked at home before, so the dish that I cooked was not very suitable for eating. However, it taught me how to prepare food and learnt to be more independent especially when I have to be living on my own in future.

 

In addition, night trekking adventure was a very unsuitable activity for me. Since I am afraid of  the dark, I have never go outside at night. Due to pratice and self-improvement, so I tried my best to complete this activity. I am very proud of myself in this point. That night, there was a problem. There were some participants fighting there, but luckily there were no any injuries.

 

There were many benefits that I acquired. I have also learned many experiences there. The camp also trained our leadership skills and independence. If you have the same programmes in school, you must try to get yourseld involved in it. I need to stop my writing here. Blessings to you, my best and forever friends.

 

 

Your friend,

Eileen 

Informal Letter( After Correction Version) :

No.28, Taman Bukit,

93250 Kuching,

Sarawak. 

10^th May 2012

Dear Michael,   

      What have you been up to lately? Are you planning anything special for the holidays? I'd like to tell you something, which is why I'm writing you this letter.

      I recently completed a three-day outdoor activity camp. As a result, I'd want to share some of my camp experiences with you. Last week, on May 3, 2012, I attended a scout camp hosted by our school. This camp has a total of twenty-eight students registered. This is the first time a camp like this has been organised. The camp is located in Sematan, which is a stunning site. 

      We all met at school and waited for the bus to arrive. We set up camp and pitched our tents at Sematan when we arrived. This form of lodging brought us closer to nature and gave us a taste of what it was like to live outside.

       Having my buddies there made me quite happy at the time. It was due to the abundance of amusing games and activities. We played "ice breaking" games on the first day. I've learnt that making new friends is the first step, and this can teach us not to be afraid to approach strangers.

        Aside from that, I participated in a variety of activities throughout the next two days. There were cookery competitions and a night trekking excursion. The cooking game was hilarious because I had never cooked at home before, and the cuisine I prepared was not particularly appetising. However, it taught me how to cook and how to be more self-sufficient, which will come in handy when I have to live alone in the future. 

        Furthermore, night trekking was a completely inappropriate pastime for me. I've never gone outside at night because I'm terrified of the dark. I tried my hardest to complete this exercise due to practise and self-improvement. In this regard, I am really pleased with myself. There was an issue that night. There were some participants fighting there, but no injuries were reported.

       I received a variety of advantages. There, I gained a lot of knowledge and experiences. Our leadership and independence were also honed at the camp. If your institution offers such programmes, you should strive to participate in them. I'm going to have to quit writing right now. Best wishes to you, my closest and most enduring friends.  

Your friend,

Eileen